They live again

Falstaff · May 19, 2007, 11:34 PM

whisper the names of the brave
in the mist and forests they are lost
beneath the fields within ancient graves
far from the rain and snow and frost

to rise again with shadows of the night
ghosts of the fallen live again
trapped between the eternal darkness and light
what once had ended now begins.

Souls of the damned suffer a thousand deaths
consumed and torn by immortal pain
Borne away on the night winds in quiet breaths
in heart of the night they live again.

GutterPunk · May 20, 2007, 05:52 PM

awesome, makes me want to walk in the graveyard at night.

Falstaff · May 20, 2007, 07:37 PM

Nebraska is pretty spooky...lots of indian legends there...
remember the great white buffalo?

GutterPunk · May 20, 2007, 07:38 PM

Yes the buffalo follows me everywhere ever since I built a parking lot over an old indian burial site.

Falstaff · May 20, 2007, 08:56 PM

now stop that...LOL

Maddogg6 · May 20, 2007, 10:17 PM

I have to say I like your 'darker side' better - that 'touchy feel-ee' stuff may work on the babes - and thats great... but its not my taste.

(Having a gal recite poetry to me does nothing for me - why? - eh - I wrote a poem once - and I used it 100 times - I can assume the opposite to be possible - so I look for 'actions' more than words when determining if someone is 'right ' for me or not... I digress - back OT sorry)

But beyond 'subject matter' - I also prefer poetry that has a 'rhythm' to the 'rhymes' - think 'song lyrics with no music'. This one also fits better into that category compared to some of your others that I felt were interesting too, but seemed to be missing 'something'.

Then again - Im no 'Poem-Meister' either.... so... wtf do I know??

Falstaff · May 21, 2007, 12:12 AM

I understand, it took me years to understand Haiku, to visualize, but that doesn't mean I really like Haiku that much, yes rhythm is important

GutterPunk · May 21, 2007, 01:42 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Maddogg6

I have to say I like your 'darker side' better - that 'touchy feel-ee' stuff may work on the babes - and thats great... but its not my taste.

(Having a gal recite poetry to me does nothing for me - why? - eh - I wrote a poem once - and I used it 100 times - I can assume the opposite to be possible - so I look for 'actions' more than words when determining if someone is 'right ' for me or not... I digress - back OT sorry)

But beyond 'subject matter' - I also prefer poetry that has a 'rhythm' to the 'rhymes' - think 'song lyrics with no music'. This one also fits better into that category compared to some of your others that I felt were interesting too, but seemed to be missing 'something'.

Then again - Im no 'Poem-Meister' either.... so... wtf do I know??

Well he isn't writing poetry for you haha :P unless you want him to

I do agree the darker side is refreshing.

Maddogg6 · May 21, 2007, 04:01 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by GutterPunk

Well he isn't writing poetry for you haha :P unless you want him to

hehe - I know - and would hope not

. I presumed posting is an invitation for constructive criticism... Im not able to do so (constructively) - I can only express my opinion/tastes... so I did...

Falstaff · May 21, 2007, 05:22 PM

well you know...
if you want to see the devil in the flesh...just look in a mirror

Maddogg6 · May 21, 2007, 07:30 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Falstaff

well you know...
if you want to see the devil in the flesh...just look in a mirror

Handsome....

May 19, 2007, 11:34 PM	#1
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May 20, 2007, 07:37 PM	Thread Starter #3
Falstaff Old Codger Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: USAFA Posts: 19,047 Rep Power: 206	Nebraska is pretty spooky...lots of indian legends there... remember the great white buffalo? __________________ "Inspiration is always a surprising visitor."

May 20, 2007, 07:38 PM	#4
GutterPunk I = Greatest Dood Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Nebraska Posts: 5,949 Rep Power: 70	Yes the buffalo follows me everywhere ever since I built a parking lot over an old indian burial site. __________________ Rock On \m/ Thank you Mousey for the Sig! --------------- Intel Core2Duo E6660 (3.4GHZ) ~ Tuniq Tower 120 ~ Enermax Galaxy 1000W ~ Corsair Dominator @ 1090MHZ 5-5-5-15 (OCZ XTC Modded Cooler)~ EVGA 8800GTX W/ HR-03 Plus 120MM ~ Asus DVD-RW LiteScribe ~ LG DVD-RW ~ Corsair Voyager 2GB ReadyBoost Drive ~ Vantec Nexus Fan Controller ~ ThermalTake Armor 25CM fan ~ Personal Finance Blog: Dent Your Debt

May 20, 2007, 08:56 PM	Thread Starter #5
Falstaff Old Codger Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: USAFA Posts: 19,047 Rep Power: 206	now stop that...LOL __________________ "Inspiration is always a surprising visitor."

May 20, 2007, 10:17 PM	#6
Maddogg6 Tail Razer Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Bernyurass, AZ - USA Posts: 4,027 Rep Power: 50	I have to say I like your 'darker side' better - that 'touchy feel-ee' stuff may work on the babes - and thats great... but its not my taste. (Having a gal recite poetry to me does nothing for me - why? - eh - I wrote a poem once - and I used it 100 times - I can assume the opposite to be possible - so I look for 'actions' more than words when determining if someone is 'right ' for me or not... I digress - back OT sorry) But beyond 'subject matter' - I also prefer poetry that has a 'rhythm' to the 'rhymes' - think 'song lyrics with no music'. This one also fits better into that category compared to some of your others that I felt were interesting too, but seemed to be missing 'something'. Then again - Im no 'Poem-Meister' either.... so... wtf do I know??

May 21, 2007, 12:12 AM	Thread Starter #7
Falstaff Old Codger Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: USAFA Posts: 19,047 Rep Power: 206	I understand, it took me years to understand Haiku, to visualize, but that doesn't mean I really like Haiku that much, yes rhythm is important __________________ "Inspiration is always a surprising visitor."

May 21, 2007, 05:22 PM	Thread Starter #10
Falstaff Old Codger Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: USAFA Posts: 19,047 Rep Power: 206	well you know... if you want to see the devil in the flesh...just look in a mirror __________________ "Inspiration is always a surprising visitor."