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May 31, 2004, 09:05 AM
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Lied
you lied from the inside I don't know why
but lord knows when I try you run and hide and now it's no longer for me to decide you no longer reside deep down inside from the place which where you lied I took your side yet you still lied I don't know why I tried to pretend to defend your every sin even then you still took that which was within |
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May 31, 2004, 09:11 AM
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EDITED FOR TASTE.....BY AUTHOR...
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May 31, 2004, 09:16 AM
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the rhyme is a bit odd (coupled iambic pentameter?).....but i like it
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May 31, 2004, 09:24 AM
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It was written mostly to express my feelings at the time. I consider it more of a story.
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May 31, 2004, 09:33 AM
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yeh i write stuff like that occasionally, but thats pretty good work dom
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May 31, 2004, 09:33 AM
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very heartfelt - I like the things you are sharing.
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May 31, 2004, 09:33 AM
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May 31, 2004, 10:49 AM
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(owned).....anyways...back on topic...i need to dig up a few of the things i wrote and i'll post em and see what BMG thinks of mine
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May 31, 2004, 03:03 PM
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dont hold back Dom...you got skills G
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May 31, 2004, 10:09 PM
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I didn't realize he was being serious...thought it was just some "ryhmes" or whatever.
My bad... 
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May 31, 2004, 11:47 PM
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yer bad indeed.....its all good tho....till you do it again
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