Drakon

Well gang, this is my 2nd poem. It's not about an experience i had or plan to have anytime soon, but the idea just popped in my head one day listening to music. So please let me know what u guys think...


[color=white]JUMP![/color]


[color=white]Jump![/color]
[color=white]Standing here at the edge[/color]
[color=white]Debating my life’s end[/color]
[color=white]All eyes fixed on me[/color]
[color=white]Finding it hard to breathe[/color]

[color=white]Jump![/color]
[color=white]The cruel wind cutting my face[/color]
[color=white]My torn heart beginning to race[/color]
[color=white]Feeling the emptiness inside[/color]
[color=white]Trying my best not to cry[/color]

[color=white]Jump![/color]
[color=white]How could you have done this to me?[/color]
[color=white]How could you have treated me that way?[/color]
[color=white]You said that you loved me[/color]
[color=white]But yet you let him lead you away[/color]

[color=white]Jump!![/color]
[color=white]Oh God, why does this have to happen?[/color]
[color=white]Why can’t you make the pain go away?[/color]
[color=white]Why does it have to be like this?[/color]
[color=white]Why does it have to end this way?[/color]

[color=white]Jump!![/color]
[color=white]Blood rushing quickly to my head[/color]
[color=white]My body preparing for the end[/color]
[color=white]With one final breath my heart gave in[/color]
[color=white]Lusting deeply for my concrete grave[/color]

[color=white]For crying out loud, JUMP!!![/color]
[color=white]And so with my eyes shut I finally did[/color]

Falstaff

damn dude....reminds me of a video...very dark. have you ever seen Glenn Danzigs work?

pr0digal jenius

already proofreaded it..but I'll say it publically...very nice

Drakon

thanks guys...

Warpy

Ummm, that was an impressive read - created a nice graphical story in my mind there, had some pretty creepy, dark images! Good work! I encourage you to make another!

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Drakon

thanks, i do have another one in the works...