Early Version - Smartphones Info PDF

**Mousey** · Oct 29, 2010, 11:06 PM

Just out of the blue i decided i wanted to write a magazine all about Smartphones, But instead of it being news and reviews, It'd be like a Smartphones for Dummies type deal

Here's the early version, What do you think?

hW Smartphones V1

ultimatedesk · Jan 6, 2011, 09:59 PM

Hey Mousey, that is a pretty neat idea - I could see maybe a quarterly release explaining all the new trends in smartphones and technology.

After scanning over it, there appears to be quite a few spelling and grammar errors, but nothing you shouldn't be able to fix easily with peer review. There is also a LOT of text, ie. this is not typical "magazine" style (It's a bit ironic too, since the first sentence says something about cutting a long story short!)

All in all, looks pretty good - tighten up your grammar and spelling (No capital letters after a comma, silly) and make sure you have a consistent point of view, and I think you'll be set

**Mousey** · Jan 8, 2011, 01:26 AM

Hence why i put TL;DR Dude in there

I think i'll definately continue to pursue this project now i've FINALLY had some feedback

Methinks an issue should be in the works especially once i get to grips with InDesign some more

Oct 29, 2010, 11:06 PM	#1
Mousey Synth's Long Lost Bro Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Web Design Hell Posts: 7,189 Rep Power: 245 System Specs	Early Version - Smartphones Info PDF Just out of the blue i decided i wanted to write a magazine all about Smartphones, But instead of it being news and reviews, It'd be like a Smartphones for Dummies type deal Here's the early version, What do you think? hW Smartphones V1 __________________

Jan 6, 2011, 09:59 PM	#2
ultimatedesk HardwareHeaven Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2010 Posts: 61 Rep Power: 19	Re: Early Version - Smartphones Info PDF Hey Mousey, that is a pretty neat idea - I could see maybe a quarterly release explaining all the new trends in smartphones and technology. After scanning over it, there appears to be quite a few spelling and grammar errors, but nothing you shouldn't be able to fix easily with peer review. There is also a LOT of text, ie. this is not typical "magazine" style (It's a bit ironic too, since the first sentence says something about cutting a long story short!) All in all, looks pretty good - tighten up your grammar and spelling (No capital letters after a comma, silly) and make sure you have a consistent point of view, and I think you'll be set

Jan 8, 2011, 01:26 AM	Thread Starter #3
Mousey Synth's Long Lost Bro Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Web Design Hell Posts: 7,189 Rep Power: 245 System Specs	Re: Early Version - Smartphones Info PDF Hence why i put TL;DR Dude in there I think i'll definately continue to pursue this project now i've FINALLY had some feedback Methinks an issue should be in the works especially once i get to grips with InDesign some more __________________