Valedictorian O_O

jsx[ifl] · Jun 19, 2005, 05:42 AM

I got picked as valedictorian from my graduating class...I wrote a speech and I'd like you guys to have a read and some criticism would be nice, i know there's alot of good writers and creative minds on this site

The speech isn't that big a deal, public high school graduation nothin ground breakin.

http://driverheavenuploads.co.uk/jsx...Shmalorian.doc

TJ- · Jun 19, 2005, 05:58 AM

pretty good, i would change this line

"but I’m sick of following my dreams, I’m just going to ask them where their going and meet up with them later."

and give a good conclusion like:

"now ladies pull your tits out and lets get it on..."

nuG · Jun 19, 2005, 06:09 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by [zi0n]aXe

pretty good, i would change this line

"but I’m sick of following my dreams, I’m just going to ask them where their going and meet up with them later."

and give a good conclusion like:

"now ladies pull your tits out and lets get it on..."

down boy

Jun 19, 2005, 05:42 AM	#1
jsx[ifl] DH's Unofficial Hero Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Montreal Posts: 650 Rep Power: 0	Valedictorian O_O I got picked as valedictorian from my graduating class...I wrote a speech and I'd like you guys to have a read and some criticism would be nice, i know there's alot of good writers and creative minds on this site The speech isn't that big a deal, public high school graduation nothin ground breakin. http://driverheavenuploads.co.uk/jsx...Shmalorian.doc __________________ [color=Gray][color=DarkRed][color=Gray][color=DarkRed][color=Gray][color=DarkRed][color=Gray][color=DarkRed][color=Gray][color=DarkRed][color=Gray][color=DarkRed][color=Gray] [/color][/color] [/color][/color][/color][/color][/color][/color][/color][/color][/color][/color][/color]

Jun 19, 2005, 05:58 AM	#2
TJ- DriverHeaven Extreme Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: Infinity Posts: 3,679 Rep Power: 0	pretty good, i would change this line "but I’m sick of following my dreams, I’m just going to ask them where their going and meet up with them later." and give a good conclusion like: "now ladies pull your tits out and lets get it on..."